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Friday 11 April 2014

SHOW NOT TELL

 
1.   Bill was excited. (He's going on his first fishing
    trip.  Bill is the main character.)
my way of I would show know tell

Jumping out of his bed filling excited at the same time bill got his stuff organise for his first fishing trip. jumping out of his bed with goose bumps, butterflies in his stomach and with excitement.
2.   Emily was angry.  (Her older sister told her she
    couldn't come shopping with her.  The main character
    is Laura, the older sister.)
my way of I would show know tell

NO stay you're not coming with me to shopping you can stay Feeling sad and mentally at the same time. clenching her fist with a red face wanting to slap her sister.
3.   Larry was jealous.  (His best friend just won $100.000
    in a lottery. Larry is the main character.)
    
my way of I would show know tell

“Nanananana i just 100.00” said Calvin. I will get you back 1 day I will get you back said Larry filling jealous at the same time.

4.   Susan was nervous.  (She's afraid she won't pass the
    spelling test.  Susan is the main character.)

my way of I would show know tell

“O no I won't pass my test I think my teacher may tell me off if I don’t pass it/’ said Susan.        

5.   Don was a loyal friend.  (Steven, his friend, has just
    struck out playing baseball.  Steven is the main
    character.)
my way of I would show know tell
oh no I miss now I am out now” said Steven nice try Steven you're the best said don

6.   Sally was smart.  (She is tutoring a friend who is
    having a hard time understanding a maths story
    problem.  The main character is Fred.)

my way of I would show know tell
no said Fred how can I get this question. can you help me sally please said Fred. yes I could help you what do you need help on said Halley. on this question said Fred.

1 comment:

Unknown said...

Great examples of showing and not telling Auri, you are really beginning to paint a picture in the readers mind and show them these scenario's instead of telling them! Keep it up!

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